Donald Vasicek- Coach - Feedback for Bloodline Blues and Girl On Fire
Hi Kim,
Reading what you write is like ballroom dancing with you.
Smooth, eclectic, exciting, inspiring, and enticing.
BlueCat Screenplay Competition Reader Feedback Analysis
Girl On Fire is a powerful story about a young girl discovering her power in the face of cruelty and oppression. Dayna, our young hero, cannot freely express femininity because her father wants a son to be his heir. By defying him, she is unknowingly targeted and kidnapped to be sold into prostitution. In this story, Dayna has done nothing wrong to deserve the treatment she's given -- her only crime was being born female. First, she's not allowed to present as a girl, then, when she does, she is persecuted. Her character in and of itself represents innocence and potential, pure childlike wonder. Her father, Mikola, is a dynamic character who learns from his mistakes and grows from his past trauma. It's understandable that he feels the way he does, after learning that he lost a son named Danylo. By the end of the story, he comes to realize that he needs to accept Dayna for who she is, and cherish her because he could lose her at any moment. He also decides to take in Angelina as his daughter, growing his family and caring for an orphan as if she were his own. Mikola is an incredibly sympathetic and heart-wrenching character, and it was very special to watch him develop throughout the story. This script has a lot of heart.
Austin Film Festival Feedback- Bloodline Blues
Dear Kimberly,
Thank you for entering your work Bloodline Blues into the 2022 Austin Film Festival Screenplay Competition:
Unfortunately, your script did not advance to the Second Round, however, Kimberly we wanted to let you know that your script was in serious consideration for the Second Round. Keep up at it! We look forward to reading your future scripts!
BlueCat Screenplay Competition Reader Feedback Analysis
GIRL ON FIRE has a bold and audacious spirit, harkening back to stark tales of survival and despair. Dayna is a protagonist who is empathetic and stuck in a dire situation that keeps the audience motivated because they care so much about her safety. That's a difficult thing to achieve. In terms of technical writing merit, this writer clearly understands screenplay format. While their voice shines brightly as subtly radical, it's also clear that the writer also understands story and how to keep a narrative moving, even when the script is wading through dark, murky, and violent waters. When mapping out Dayna's character arc, her narrative is comparable to Jennifer Lawrence in WINTER'S BONE, which is the sort of meaty, toothsome character that draws powerful acting talent and could even lead to the discovery of someone new and special.
Los Angeles Screenplay Awards Diversity Initiative Feedback on placing in their competition as a Semi-Finalist Feedback
Bloodline Blues - We're pleased to inform you that your script has placed as a SEMI-FINALIST in the Los Angeles International Screenplay Awards Diversity vi Initiative! Congratulations! You will now be able to view your published name and script title on our website at https://lascreenplayawards.com /result/ feel free to share your success with your network and beyond once the results are published online. Our contest results are also going to be publicized via newsletter to our 25,000+ industry contacts! Again, congratulations. You've written a fine script.
Yeti FilmFest in Ireland Feedback about Bloodline Blues
Dear Kimberly,
Congratulations from YETI FilmFest - Bloodline Blues is a SEMI-FINALIST!
Hope this finds you well and even better soon! We're buzzing with excitement here at YETI FilmFest, and it's all thanks to your incredible work on Bloodline Blues. Out of 729 submissions, your project didn't just participate; it stood out, speaking volumes about your talent and the stories you're here to tell. - “Girl On Fire” placed as Semi-Finalist - and the same feedback was given- I entered them both into the competition at the same time. .
C L I M A X International Film Festival in Madrid feedback on Girl On Fire
¡Felicitaciones! - Finalist of C L I M A X Festival Internacional de Cinema Independiente 2024
I am Raúl Asensio Diez, director of the C L I M A X Festival Internacional de Cinema Independiente, writing with the joy of great news for you!
Girl On Fire's final results in our Spring 2024 competition round was...
1 x Nominee Outstanding Macabre or Suspense Screenplay
Among a whopping 537 submissions, your exceptional work has made it to our final results lists! This achievement is massive, and you must be so proud. Extraordinary achievement!
Fiilmovia International Film Festival Feedback
Dear Kimberly,
Congratulations! Your project, Girl On Fire, has been selected as an Award Winner at the Filmovia International Film Festival. Your project stood out among many exceptional entries.
Elegant International Film Festival Feedback - Winning an esteem award
Girl On Fire: Holy popcorn, congratulations are in order! Your film rocked the screens and snagged an award at the Elegant International Film Festival! 🎉🎬
I couldn't wait to reach out and give you a massive high-five (virtually, of course) for this incredible achievement. Seriously, your storytelling skills are out of this world! Your film had us on the edge of our seats, and now, winning an award? That's the cherry on top!
Your creativity, vision, and pure talent have left a mark on the festival, and honestly, it's no surprise. Your work has always had that 'wow' factor that makes audiences sit up and take notice.
This win isn't just a trophy; it's a testament to your dedication and passion for storytelling. You've not only wowed the judges but also inspired a whole bunch of budding filmmakers (including me!) to aim for the stars.
Keep shining bright, keep creating magic, and keep inspiring us all with your incredible talent! Can't wait to see what cinematic wonders you'll unleash next!
Cheers to you, your film, and all the awesomeness that's yet to come! 🌟🍿
Rock on!